Thursday, May 24, 2012

The Husband's Prayer

Resist not my hands that'll move
Over and under with pulsating veins
And scatter all the knots and seams in the way
As pebbles on the path of streams among hills
That roar into unstoppable falls.

The surge that'll move
Through soft-soothing hands
Over our babe in the cradle asleep,
Now through my lips and finger will flow
In these our honeysuckle days.

Hours are lost amidst unceasing zest
That blossoms amidst sheets of sweet unrest.

27 comments:

sayan said...

this is so sensuous...

Jack said...

The similes are fantastic here. The flow spread out slowly while reading.

Mary said...

Very well expressed, Abin! Deep feelings here.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

This is so beautiful and tender....."our honeysuckle days". Wow!

Matthew John Davies said...

A true prayer in and of the earth. Almost in the psalmic tradition. Praises!

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Beautiful words so very well expressed.

Anna :o]

Heaven said...

Lovely and sweet music in those sheets ~

I love it ~

Rajrupa said...

Very beautiful

Old Ollie said...

tight poem all around - really dig your style

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Lovely.

Mary said...

Visiting once again from the Poetry Pantry, Abin! Just as enjoyable the second time around.....

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I loved this just as much this time around - the honeysuckle days, the baby asleep in the cradle.........a beautiful time of life.

Susie Clevenger said...

So beautiful.

Isadora Gruye said...

Hours are lost amidst unceasing zest
That blossoms amidst sheets of sweet unrest.


Absolutely love those last few lines and the idea of sweet unrest. Well done, what a great way to start my Monday. Viva la

Aidz Giannini said...

Some strong words used but soothing when spoke

kaykuala said...

Beautiful verse, Abin! Our own kids provide the motivation and inspiration for us to do more.

Hank

Gemma Wiseman said...

Quiet intimacy abounds in these honeysuckle days you describe!

Kerry O'Connor said...

I was struck by the title of the poem, and loved how you focused on the sensuality of a committed relationship.

Herotomost said...

Its hard to put a masculine turn into peoms of love and emotion, but you did that very well here. Crafted by strong hands. Great job.

Helen said...

This is the 'stuff' the best of the best relationships are made of ..... Lovely.

Kim Nelson said...

How did I miss this earlier? Lovely! The connections and imagery both seduce and please. Relationship expounded, albeit with brevity. Nicely done, Abin.

http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/06/08/lighten-your-own-load/

hedgewitch said...

This is just excellent--full of love, sensuality, serenity--all the good stuff. Fine work.

Kay L. Davies said...

I love the last three lines, Abin. Beautiful.
K

Marian said...

beautiful, oh yes. quite nearly a sonnet, oh hell i think you should just call it a sonnet. lovely love love.

Margaret said...

An amazingly emotional and sensual love poem written by a man. Love this.

Peggy said...

Lovely. The title captured me. Such a sensual poem.

Jyothi Nair said...

Loved the last two lines. Everything else just melted into it. Lovely. :)