Tuesday, August 30, 2011

Anxiety creeps

Anxiety creeps
As worms in petals in bloom;
Anxiety creeps
And spreads and drips
On the floor of the room
Through chinks in scrawlings of gloom.
Anxiety creeps.

[Written as part of the format challenge on rondelet at http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/]

11 comments:

Kim Nelson said...

Anxiety creeps... indeed it does. You've addressed a sensation to which many relate, and done a fine job of honoring the rondelet form too. Nicely done.

http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/08/30/want-the-change/

Abin Chakraborty said...

thank you...:)

Kerry O'Connor said...

What a great metaphor you have devised in this Rondelet. It's very effective.

Thank you for sharing your work on Real Toads.

Abin Chakraborty said...

The pleasure is really mine.

Old Raven said...

Oh this is most excellent. Makes me feel better about writing one myself!

Amrita Dhar said...

impressive

Robert Lloyd said...

This was a great rondelet Abin. I really like how you have captured anxiety so vividly. Well done.

Abin Chakraborty said...

thank u robert.keep reading :)

Ed Pilolla said...

oooo, this tingled as i read it. so very well done. it certainly does not flow, it creeps.
here from rosemary's place.

Robert said...

Very song like, very portrait like, very rhythmic. Good one.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

This is fantastic - and exactly what anxiety feels like. Wonderful rondolet!!!!!