Anxiety creeps
As worms in petals in bloom;
Anxiety creeps
And spreads and drips
On the floor of the room
Through chinks in scrawlings of gloom.
Anxiety creeps.
[Written as part of the format challenge on rondelet at http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/]
11 comments:
Anxiety creeps... indeed it does. You've addressed a sensation to which many relate, and done a fine job of honoring the rondelet form too. Nicely done.
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thank you...:)
What a great metaphor you have devised in this Rondelet. It's very effective.
Thank you for sharing your work on Real Toads.
The pleasure is really mine.
Oh this is most excellent. Makes me feel better about writing one myself!
impressive
This was a great rondelet Abin. I really like how you have captured anxiety so vividly. Well done.
thank u robert.keep reading :)
oooo, this tingled as i read it. so very well done. it certainly does not flow, it creeps.
here from rosemary's place.
Very song like, very portrait like, very rhythmic. Good one.
This is fantastic - and exactly what anxiety feels like. Wonderful rondolet!!!!!
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