and what transpires in the corners never peeped compells us all to wonder. The fact that you have left the significant details to the imagination shows the trademark of a real poet who knows how to bring his audience to a moment without talking through the whole thing. great job.
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Enjoyed this, Abin!
wow. nicely chosen words and tied together.
Very chilling! This could be the start of a longer tale..
Wow, this is terrific and makes me want more stanzas!
Eek! This little piece is so well worded, good one.
Doing th soul's bookkeeping can be rough work.I agree this would be a fine beginning to a longer poem, but it also works this way.
Wow! Terrific write!
Wonderful! I love the use of the word "ledger" as a verb here.
That was fun! :-D
and what transpires in the corners never peeped compells us all to wonder. The fact that you have left the significant details to the imagination shows the trademark of a real poet who knows how to bring his audience to a moment without talking through the whole thing. great job.
viva la
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